Walking Alone

[jaymark]

Walking Alone - Jaymark
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Lyrics

Seems like nobody's holding my hand at the other end
Walking all alone, these days beeing happy I pretend
I feel like in this darkness there's nobody to see me fall
And would somebody step up real for me if i shall get false
Run to the precipice is anyone gonna hold me back ?
So inside me I dive, feel like I will never get that
I'm in the plane of solitude and it's freezing my brain
Where pain's more intense from standing under that lonely rain
Walking hallways and nobody seems to see me walk
No look no sound I feel like they don't even wanna talk
Feel like no ones paying attention as I express my point
My hands so frail that I drop down all my coins
But from days to days I've created my own life shield
I've work by myself, I've done my best thru all those yells
Soul isolating, armor shaped from years to years
And my fears slowly faded and got far away from here
But it's getting me tired, and now I feel back so lonely
I'm weaker everyday, I feel today will be the only
I'm all alone in this world which in I need to grow
So I need to stop crying, get stronger and start to glow

[Concepts]

Hey, I check out your stuff. I like it. You are like, in my opinion, (older) Eminem mixed with SPM. You got that lazy flow but your subject leans more towards Eminem.

I really liked it, keep up the good work. Your mic sounds good. Only thing is you don't have to add the back up vocal after every line. Only add it to the ones that really prove a point or where you feel you want more emotion to show. Also try and shorten up your lines just a tad, tad bit.

Keep it comin!

[jaymark]

Thanks

[icy]

right on the emineme

cuz he use word closly related or sound alot alike kinda like
"Seems like nobody's holding my hand at the other end
Walking all alone, these days beeing happy I pretend "

pretend and end

but this is a good look

[eSe Chango]

it's good jay...nice topic..my only advice would be to make sure to pronounce every word a lil better so that we can tell what ur sayin...sometimes it seemed like u tried to spit out too many words per bar...maybe get rid of some filler words? .. idk..but other than that it was good hom13...get a hook and 2 more verses and u'll have a good song Jay...GOOD JOB!