(8Barz)starting of a verse

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I stabe lyrics with a stake-nife, i murder words live, call it a stage-fright
im the reason why people dont come out late-night
im the reason why people turn into the snake-type
hit the brake-light and carsh that suma bitch untill it ant shaped-right
i mistaked-hype, cuz i try'd suicide twice an i still ant at the grave-site
SCREAMIN, IM NOT AFRADE-LIGHT!, beam me up so i can exscape-life
but i hate-white-shinen-bright cuz i live in the shade-like-"Simon-Stride"
i need to take-flight-glidin-like 911's plane-ride-colliden-blind

small verse, not finished yet..still needs 2 more verses an a hock...an a coures..jus somethin i ben playn around wit..should i keep this flo..or??...some opinons would be sweet..

[wizardofoz]

its wicked bro, readin it makes me wanna skate ice
forget that i played dice, raped life, reinvigorated as i make rhymes
deviation from the light
in the shadows
but as i see u sway
as i play from the stage rewakenin my main right
to freedom
limitations i don't need them
but i do cuz life is gradual, stickin away, if i can from the cemetery grave guy
on the man who thinks man should lives in cans prison bars just because a brother blazed pipes
its literal, your digitals are criminal for riddlin in the late night its absurd
so i gotta keep the incense burnin for fiddling with the herb
and now rocked and turn from the yearn of eating meat
cuz i'z lost, under earned, in a curv3,
and u are what u eat, see
so i part with the weak mammal blinded by the weak diet
this a me riot
i don't need no sheep or bleeding calf that shit is weak
if i need the blood on my teeth i'll be sinkin teeth into a b-b-leeding v-v-veeeegina
cuz i don't wanna be a meek kinda
animal decisions crippled in a herd
I'd rather pray on the main pirates who imprison with visions of slavery to tame and take life
of you, your brothers, your sisters, your sons and daughters
i'm getting under neath this now i'm turning ice to water

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kool...that was pritty tight...ah i was jus wounderin if i could get some feed back thats all..lol

[wizardofoz]

lol.. sorry bro, in other words.. that shit is tight. hey man u should know if u make somebody drop a verse after here a verse of urs its the flow i got a little lost there. good stuff, keep goin

[jayballa4]

pretty dope man..i wanna see the next 8 bars. and yes keep the flow.

[KingKidd]

a hook and course are the samething

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thanx to all of ya'll much appreshated....i'll drop the other 8 lines an another sixteen afta wordz..

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Originally Posted by wizardofoz

lol.. sorry bro, in other words.. that shit is tight. hey man u should know if u make somebody drop a verse after here a verse of urs its the flow i got a little lost there. good stuff, keep goin

thanx dude glade to hear my flow got you goin...sweet shit..you got ur self a good flow goin there also